#1
I sit alone and wipe the tears from my eyes
I didn?t think this would happen again
I?m not really sure I can make it this time
This pain is eating me alive

I don?t know why that we end up this way
It seems like we?re always getting into a fight
You act like we have nothing left to say
But I know we can make it work

Chorus: Without your love nothing feels the same
Without your love I will fade away
Ill be with you until my dying day
Cause baby all I know is I love you

I know we?ve had some trouble in the past
This road we?re traveling?s had its ups and downs
But I know our love is strong enough to last
If we can just talk this through

So wont you listen to the words in this song
They?re being wrote straight from the heart
I won?t pretend that ive done nothing wrong
Oh baby can you please forgive me

Chorus: Without your love nothing feels the same
Without your love I will fade away
Ill be with you until my dying day
Cause baby all I know is I love you
Last edited by kingcobra85 at May 8, 2006,
#2
spelling mistake. in line one.

This is an over done topic i feel and it wasn't present in an original way, however I'm sure it works jsut fine as a song but as a lyrical piece i feel it is weak and lacking.
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#4
something other than "not knowing" would help make it origional. It seems like everyone beats the crap out of not having any answers....which is easy to do cause thats how you feel at the time. But, try and think of a different metaphor or something that makes the listener dig deeper to see how you feel, rather than just saying it.
#5
i think it be cheeesy.
HOWEVER.
Nothing wrong with a little mature chedder eh?
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#6
Definately not. I mean, there are some expensive cheeses out there! lol
Any more crits would be appreciated, and thanks to all those who have provided some already.
#7
it is definetely a over used topic but if you can make it your own it'd be awesome. a song about breaking up seems cheesey.
#8
Its not about breaking up. Its about being on the verge, or at the crossroads. Its like you have a choice, make it work or call it quits. Basically its during a time when he was in this situation, and he decided to make it work and told her that without her love he's nothing. I can see how you would think that its about breaking up, but its really not. The reason i know all of this is because my brother is the one who wrote the song.
Last edited by recklessjb at May 9, 2006,