#1
Ok, this is the first song i've made before. I asked my bandmembers what they thought about it and they said i was awesome, but i still want more opinions on it, so please read it. it's kinda long but just read through it, please.

VERSE
You better lok before you dodge.
cuz you will find that you've...
been waiting for this.
Down in the cove where
the Shadow Figures creep out on the walls,
It's like wasting batteries.
Sometimes i just wish for Something new.
Because
Sometimes i just want Something
but i dont know what, it is...

Chorus (get a little heavier)
Insustaining with the Tension
Sitting in the corner biting your lip
Wish you where here to help me through this
to bring me back down to where i belong

Verse 2
When the lights are dim
I fade into the darkness
And need your help to guide me
Through my past mistakes
And i wish i could replace them
To save you
To save me
From drifting far away
From this place
We call our home
And i will not regret
This One...

Chorus 2
Insustaining with the Tension
Sitting in the corner biting your lip
Wish you where here to help me through this
to bring me back down to where i belong

Verse 3
And i wish i could say this
To your face
But everytime i try
I fail miserably
Sometimes i just wish i could
get away
from here
From this place
We call out home
And i will not regret
This time...

Chorus 3
insustaining with the Tension
Laying in the corner biting your lip
Sometimes i wish that you could
Sometimes i wish you would
help me through this
And bring me back down to where i belong
Where i belong

Verse 4
Come here with me tonight
We'll get away from this place
the place that i said i'd
never leave
But i've made up my mind
and there's no turning back
from this....time

Chorus 4 (softly)
Insustaining from the Tension
All alone in that corner
Sometimes i wish that you
could help me through this
(through this)
and bring me back down
to where
i
belong

Repeated Chorus (heavier)
Insustaing from the Tension
All alone in that corner
Sometimes i wish that you would
help me through this
and bring me down
to where i belong

Last Verse (acoustic part)
I'm all alone again.
and an eerie silence
is coming through the door
to tell me
I'm
gone...
again


Ok, like i said, this is my first ever song i've written. please leave comments.
it's called Random Things because of the way i wrote it.
i wrote down all the random phrases that came into my head, to see if i could make a song out of it.
Thanks
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#2
good work kid your songwritting skills have been proved (you must have a great
lead singer!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!)
#4
nice
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