A song/poem i wrote a while ago, i dont really know what im going to do with it yet so tell me what you think. i'll repay all crits. thanks!

Good morning sunshine

You are the light of morning
That glows so brilliantly
To out-flicker the stars we have no use for
And I, I am pretending to be night
To satisfy my obsession with darkness
So when you remember me,
Remember the moon
That has no purpose than to follow
And you?ll feel at home in the clouds once more
When I think of you
I?ll picture the happiness
In each day you bring
And the innocence infront of you
A product of your incinerating shine
And I?ll be grateful you have more questions than can be answered
I?ll thank the stars I?m always a step behind
Great poem, I really liked it. Its good that you have written a happy song, a lot of the stuff around now is un-happy music. Different but very good.

Keep it up.
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i think it sounds great!
i dont no if u could say it was happy??
depends which way u take it i guess!
but keep up the good work!
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Oh, and azza, you're a pretty good writer! Graybass is a god amongst men and you're turning real quick to be his new messiah lol.

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it's kinda cliched and cheesy... but I freaking love it. I'm a sucker for cute love stuff like this. haha, really

yeah so anyway, this piece is really great. Nobody could ever say no to you if you showed them this!
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Thanks. outside.ice, do you have anything you want me to look at? i'll get to your new piece jallas.

(haha aaron.)
To out-flicker the stars we have no use for


liiiiiiiiike it. Sound like it should be a song, with just an acoustic geeta, strumming away to the song's pretty brilliance....
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