#1
So I was in the mood to write a really fast, simple song that would sound good and I came up with these lyrics for it.

Everyday I wake up at six.
Go to school then zone out
My teacher's spewing ****
I went to the lost and found!

I went to the lost and found, the lost and found.
I went to the lost and found, the lost! And found!!

Halfway through, I eat my lunch
Stand in line, five minutes left
I know someone spiked the punch!
I went to the end of the line!

I went to the end of the line, the end of the line
I went to the end of the line! The end of the line.
#3
this is...diffrent. personally ive never heard anything like it and it doesnt really apeal to me
always ME!
#4
too simple for my taste. you should make it more easier for us to read, by that, i mean that you should make it more interesting and appealing for us.
The trouble with nude dancing is that not everything stops moving when the music does.

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#5
dude, sweet song. this is what life is about. sometimes you just need to loosen up and trade the "cut my wrists/she died last night/ i bleed for you/ i **** nails" and replace it with

Everyday I wake up at six.
Go to school then zone out
My teacher's spewing ****
I went to the lost and found! "

mines at https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=358337
#6
Quote by Green_Fox
too simple for my taste. you should make it more easier for us to read, by that, i mean that you should make it more interesting and appealing for us.



agreed. And the title is six, it only mentions that once in the song. The title dosen't fit.
And i have to be honest, i don't like the song. Pick a new topic and start over.

P.S. thanks for criting my song
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