#1
this is an acoustic song. please comment:

Wake Up (We Watch Our Lives Slip By):


Trees sway
kind of like my life
im, going away
from you now

Trees sway
outside of your front porch
now, as we lay
we watch our lives slip by

Grab on
to something firm
Hold on
to someone you can learn from <----(chorus)
Wake up
my dear it's time to run from
problems, once again...

Birds fly
kind of like my life
and, We ask "why?"
to life's hardest questions

Birds fly
outside of your front porch
now, as we lie
we watch our lives slip by

Grab on
to something firm
Hold on
to someone you can learn from
Wake up
my dear it's time to run from
problems, once again...

we watch our lives slip by...
we watch our lives slip by...
I'm Back.


[STAY THIRSTY, MY FRIENDS]


When Autumn comes, it doesn't ask
It just walks in where it left you last
You never know when it starts
Until there's fog inside the glass around your summer heart
#2
normally at the end where it repeats ("we watch our lives slip by...we watch our lives slip by...") i dont like it. but in this case it really fits with the song. i like it
always ME!
#3
i really like this song, it is the music i like to listen to. looks great.

Can u crit mine? "life is too short"
~gtrfrk


founder of the dunlop pick fan club


RIP Roger "Syd" Barrett


"Let the good times roll"
#4
somethin bout this song i really like....too bad i cant write anything anywhere near as good....
#5
i like it.... id like to hear it with guitar too... i write the sort of music youve got posted here too. very meaningful...well done