#1
The Best Timing For The Best Thing You Could?ve Told Me.


V1:
Looking back on what happened,
All the things that you said
The words break out and honestly
You couldn?t have lost the best of me
And all of the smiles
They said it better,
Than anything you could say
When the laughter turned to silence
And you lit up my day

Chorus:
Just kiss me a love note,
There are other ways to say,
Say that you?ll care
Say that you care
Just sing me your chorus
There are other ways to say,
Say that you?ll care
Say that you care

V2:
When all that you want
Is your own satisfaction
Pulling on my heart strings
But in on his attraction
When the love in my eyes,
Is lost in your reaction,
I want it to know you,
When I know we?ll move on.

Chorus:
Just kiss me a love note,
There are other ways to say,
Say that you?ll care
Say that you care
Just sing me your chorus
There are other ways to say,
Say that you?ll care
Say that you care


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#2
I thought the second vs. sounded really good. The first vs. had good subject and everything, but it just doesn't seem to flow when it's read. But then again, it's not like I have a tune to go with it or a melody. As poetry, sounds good.
#3
not bad... it mite need a bit more done on it coz its not a very long song, unless you sing it slowly.
#4
The Best Timing For The Best Thing You Could?ve Told Me.


V1:
Looking back on what happened,
All the things that you said
The words break out and honestly
You couldn?t have lost the best of me
And all of the smiles
They said it better,
Than anything you could say
When the laughter turned to silence
And you lit up my day

**Pretty strong opening. I think maybe changing
"You couldn't have lost the best of me" to something more like "You couldn't have lost a better part of me" might sound better.**

Chorus:
Just kiss me a love note,
There are other ways to say,
Say that you?ll care
Say that you care
Just sing me your chorus
There are other ways to say,
Say that you?ll care
Say that you care

**Definately like the chorus. It's got a good flow to it.**

V2:
When all that you want
Is your own satisfaction
Pulling on my heart strings
But in on his attraction
When the love in my eyes,
Is lost in your reaction,
I want it to know you,
When I know we?ll move on.

**Another fairly strong verse. Second half seems to be lacking a bit to me, but still pretty good.**

Chorus:
Just kiss me a love note,
There are other ways to say,
Say that you?ll care
Say that you care
Just sing me your chorus
There are other ways to say,
Say that you?ll care
Say that you care


Overall, i give it an 8. Excellent work. keep it up

Feel free to critique mine if you have the time https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=358930