#1
Like a flock of doves
And the flightless siren
Like a blood lust love
And the way the sun had caught your eyes
And glimpse I caught
And the way you stared
And the way that I
Was never aware

That I could feel this
Among everything
Feel something
With nothing at all
And I could retrace
All of my steps
And relieve that single moment
With no regrets

Like a child?s laugh
And a loveless couple
The way we live
And the endless struggle
The way I thought
I was happy and free
But happiness is never free

Because I could feel this
Among everything
Feel something
With nothing at all
I could retrace
All of my steps
And relieve that single moment
With no regrets

The lifeless figure
Slumped over the bed
The way I felt
And what I said
What have I done?
What have I lost?
What will I do?
What is the cost?

Because I could feel this
Among everything
Feel something
With nothing at all
I could retrace
All of my steps
And relieve that single moment
With no regrets

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#2
Like a flock of doves
And the flightless siren
Like a blood lust love
And the way the sun had caught your eyes
And glimpse I caught
And the way you stared
And the way that I
Was never aware

A little vague, and didn't really have a good hook, but the last 5 lines I liked.

That I could feel this
Among everything
Feel something
With nothing at all
And I could retrace
All of my steps
And relieve that single moment
With no regrets

Didn't really get it until I read it out loud with passion, and it wasn't until then that I enjoyed this part! So yeah this one was really good.

Like a child?s laugh
And a loveless couple
The way we live
And the endless struggle
The way I thought
I was happy and free
But happiness is never free

I feel that the last 3 lines should be fixed somehow... the very last line with the word "free" didnt seem to make much sense, and seemed to be a forced rhyme. But the above lines were good.

The lifeless figure
Slumped over the bed
The way I felt
And what I said
What have I done?
What have I lost?
What will I do?
What is the cost?

Not sure where the story was going here... I could picture something like a guy just killed someone, which means it had some imagery there, but maybe if you could put more depth into this one it would be good. But there was good rhyme here.

Its pretty okay. You're onto something and if you could add some more depth it could be great! Oh and just to let you know the title attracted me so yeah lol.
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