#1
About to handstand

To all you acrobats,
The covered faces,
The disguised in places:
Spread eagle,
Label legal

You idiots better get it planned,
I?m about to handstand.

Album Art For The Album I Have Yet To Find:

Last edited by thepickups at May 13, 2006,
#2
cute bedsheets =]


To all you acrobats,
The covered faces,
The disguised in places:
Spread eagle,
Label legal

the only thing I'd suggest to change here would be in the very last line I'd put "labelled legal" instead of "label legal". In this way, it sounds more like you're describing the people. It just wounds wrong the way it is. Love this. Really really good.

Oh another thing I'd maybe change would possibly be in the first line, having "to all of you acrobats". Iunno.

You idiots get it planned,
I?m about to handstand.

This is kinda jerky. The first line should be longer IMO. Something like "you idiots should get it planned."

good work though. really good.
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#4
wicked.

the labelled part is a command, not a description, so i need it as that.

those sheets are yours anytime

Hey Caz, callum your name? I dunno. Long time.
Last edited by thepickups at May 13, 2006,
#6
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the labelled part is a command, not a description, so i need it as that.

that's cool, makes sense now lolz.

those sheets are yours anytime

oh rawr!
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#8
Another one of your short little pieces, which I admit I find quite obscure at times. Interesting use of rhyming here made the whole thing hold together well. It's certainly in an angry tone, I'd even go so far to say it's rather 'angsty'; however, still a nice piece of work.

Now to my main point:

I read you promoting West Ham in another thread around here, so I just wanted to remind you of Stevie G's 35 yard wonderstrike, and the penalty heroics from Mr. Pepe (God) Reina, which helped bring the FA cup back home to a deserving Anfield for a seventh time.

Sorry, but it had to be said. Cheers anyway.
#9
Prick!

Not just you, the whole scum team!

Pepe=Awful match bar the penalties!
Stevie G=Your Team
Hammers=Unlucky
Game=Great to watch
Next Year=Everton vs Liverpool, Everton 6:0

#10
(I apologise in advance for 'spam')

C'mon now, no need to be so touchy - maybe you're right, and next year Everton will get further than the fourth round (or whatever it was) before bein' pummelled by a better team (hopefully not Chelsea!).

Oh Wow! Look at my avatar! Isn't that trophy nice and shiny. Oooh - I bet you wish you could touch it; in all of its steely glory.


That's it, I'm finished acting like a five year old.

For now.