#1
Hey, this is my third song. Please crit it. Crit for crit, so don't hesitate critting this!

"We Are The Future"

They think our generation sucks
That we'll never be successful
Never make the big bucks
We are only doubted
They don't listen to us
Till the day I shouted
Till the day I shouted...

Why don't you
Believe in our minds
It's not what we show
It's all what's inside
So just give us a chance
Just let us demonstrate
All that we can do
Cause our lives are up to us
And they're not up to you...

They say we'll crash and burn
They say we'll never make it
But why can't they just stop thinking that
I know that we can do this
Why are we the ones that are doubted
Why for us do they have no confidence
Is it that
Their minds are way too dense
I really wish they would just
Get over themselves
Faith in us is not optional
It is a must

Why don't you
Believe in our minds
It's not what we show
It's all what's inside
So just give us a chance
Just let us demonstrate
All that we can do
Cause our lives are up to us
And they're not up to you...

Please, all we're asking of you
Is to just stop believing
All those things that you do
You are not accurate
And you are not right
We won't back down
Without a fight
Cause we have hopes
And we have dreams
So in your corrupt minds
Let us be redeemed
As the way we are
And the future we will be
We are America
We are the world

Why don't you
Believe in our minds
It's not what we show
It's all what's inside
So just give us a chance
Just let us demonstrate
All that we can do
Cause our lives are up to us
And they're not up to you...
#3
Yes, it's going to be a pop punk/punk rock song. Not TRUE punk, more like Simple Plan style i guess.

-OA
#4
it fits
if you can get a good chord pattern going
this good be a hit
maybe not a big one
it would need some bridges and interludes for all of those lyrics
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#6
i would probably add we are the future
with a big bang everytime you hit it
except the last then make it a measure late
that would be awesome
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