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Constructive critiscism please- and if you have something you want me to check out link to it in your reply. Thanks in advance

[edit] just fixed some embarassing typo's

Take a look at my body
a taste of my soul
Pretend to be happy
will you see the hole

And behind your lashes
your iris of coal
All i see is ashes
a burned out soul

Behind the darkness and weakness
we're still both alone
Hiding in the sadness and sweetness
i'm still your unknown

You'r the last dying light
no one will mourn
But the shadows by night
that'll now dance alone

And you'r the moment
when everything fades
From sweetness to torment
from clarity to shades

Behind the darkness and weakness
we're still both alone
Hiding in the sadness and sweetness
i'm still your unknown
Last edited by neoteric at May 14, 2006,