#1
Well I haven't visited this site in a while, so i figured id post some of my poetry. Tell me what you think about it.


wipe up these footprints
i think there coming
i hear the rafters shaking
the doors are locked
the doors are locked
the pews are slipping from the corridor
i try to save them but
but my arms arent long enough
millions of people could die
no one will die
no one knows about this sanctuary
I'm nervous someone will find out
I swear to you ill break this glass if you dont lay down
Your not here, i am alone
come in the rain will soak your adolesence
yelling yelling yelling
the window breaks come to your senses
Jim's a midget!!
Last edited by atticus13 at May 15, 2006,
#2
Are these connected?
I liked both of them but I think that in of itself is a bit of a problem deary, There is two. And I think that has something to do with the FAQ. But I Digress, the first one I liked quite a bit as it reminds me of my own style in some of my own writing, that sort of paniced collecting one's thoughts fighting with your conscience idea.
My work if you have time: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=359179
Jesse Wants To Die Just As Much As You Want Him Dead