#1
That was fun so here's another..girls are cliche i know just read. Thanks.

You're sitting there across from me
I take my glances cautiously
So you can't catch my wandering eye

You carry yourself flawlessy...
flawlessy away from me
And outside

So I plan my route deliberately
Specifically so you can see me
As I pass by

And you're shivering away from me
Do you ever think how much warmer you could be
By my side?

Hey beautiful
Look at you go
With you're fashion sense and pretty, pretty confidence
You soar through the room
With me dangling by a leash at your feet
Begging to be lead on
So lead me on
<my tongue's the only muscle on my body that works harder than my heart>
#2
By the way that's a work in progress...
<my tongue's the only muscle on my body that works harder than my heart>
#5
Thanks for the advice Bmm- I just thought of the shivering part and kind of moved away from the mini story... I'll see what I can do to fix it tomorrow
<my tongue's the only muscle on my body that works harder than my heart>
#6
And you're shivering away from me
Do you ever think how much warmer you could be
By my side?


AWESOME. I really like the ryhming scheme you got going on there, and i think you succesfully pulled off the theme of the girl, without being clishe!! 8/10 from me.
Nice one xx
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