#1
This is my first time through, Im going to totally rerecord it cause i ****ed up and added that stupid effect on the guitar at the beginning, and just some vocal timing screw ups (like i said one time through) But I just want to know if the vocals sound on key at least for the most part, feel free to send any crits this way also,
thanks

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#2
this is pretty great my friend. I'm surprised nobody has commented on it yet. You have a voice that could be great. it already has a really nice tone, all you need now is a littttle more control. Also it might be helpful to sing with a little more emotion. However your voice does sound really good and you have a hell of a lot of potential. Guitar playing is pretty spot on. Not much to say about that.

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#3
GREAT job, what tab did you use. and whats that strumming pattern, you have a great voice
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#4
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GREAT job, what tab did you use. and whats that strumming pattern, you have a great voice


i believe its..

u|d|m|u|u|u|m


i hope you know what those symbols mean lol.. if not
u = up
d = down
m = mute
#5
yeah its hard to tab haha cause you just kinda do it after a while its like this using his symbols ^ this is how i played it anyway d u m m m u u u m m m and then its just timing, and knowing when not to hit the strings at all and the chords for the verse are
Dm - F - Bb F

the transistion to the chorus goes Dm - F - Bb - C

Then the chorus is F - C - C# - D - A - Bb - B - C - F - C then it starts over,
those half steps like C - C# and Bb - B are those quick little stums in between chords

also thanks a lot for the crits
#8
that actually wasn't nearly as good as the previous reviews said... the vocals in that song aren't hard to hit anyway... your timing was horrible.. the guitar part was was a mess.

no offense or anything b/c I'm a jack Johnson fanatic, but over all it could use alot of work... how long have you been playing?


Quote by Scott3229
This is my first time through, Im going to totally rerecord it cause i ****ed up and added that stupid effect on the guitar at the beginning, and just some vocal timing screw ups (like i said one time through) But I just want to know if the vocals sound on key at least for the most part


...read the original post, i told you, i recorded it in one shot, and i pointing out that i had ****ed up timing in a part or two, but your criticism isnt constructive or accurate for you to say my timing was horrible and ur guitar part is a mess, how does that help me in any way? and i aside from a couple parts id say the timing was pretty damn accurate for reading lyrics while im playing and singing on a recording on the first time through... and im not hearing any lyrics or anything that would constitue difficult timing and strumming patterns on ur recordings, and in fact ur timing is much less than perfect in 2 of your songs, next time ill say CONSTRUCTIVE crits...my fault, im not being bitter, i just resent people that shoot ANYONE down with out CONSTRUCTIVELY criticizing it
Last edited by Scott3229 at May 20, 2006,
#10
^^ Almost every time I see a post by u and its in the part of the forum its negative and brigning someone else down. Oh and I saw your pic, and I see why you are so critical to other people on the internet, because everybody beats your ass at school, ****in nerd get a life.
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#11
lets not make this a penis envy issue. we all know I take the cake for that one... keep petting it and hoping it grows one day.

stick to the issue instead of resorting to name calling for a picture that was taken in the backroom of a classroom with someones cell camera and dont piss on other peoples candles to make your own burn brighter. Thats a bit degenerative.


you dont get any better at anything if people are always telling you how great you are now do you unless your a momas boy, in which case your a lesser man.
Last edited by silentdud at May 21, 2006,
#12
you dont get any better at anything if people are always telling you how great you are now do you.


No but you also dont get any better by people saying everything sucks without and suggestions for improvement
Last edited by Scott3229 at May 21, 2006,
#13
OK suggestion: learn the timing and how to play the song before you record it an place it on the internet. maybe actually listen to the song. Take the criticism and deal with it bitching wont make the recording any better and it definitely wont make you a better guitarist.
Last edited by silentdud at May 21, 2006,
#14
did you take it down, scott? i was looking forward to listening!
#15
yeah, im making room for my next original song, oh apparently it sucks according one person, ironically enough the person with no vocals on his page...


its reposted now, ill just tak eit down when my orginal is done
#16
hmm i'm still not seeing it up there, i'll check back in a little bit. i like your rendition of pig though... great song, great artist, good cover!
#18
hey man dont listen to people trying to break balls.....i really like your voice...never heard the original song, but you play this way very well....you have a good sound on the acoustic and once again your voice goes absolutely great with the song .....woah....last note.....im sure its in the song but it doesnt really fit...haha anyways, great job! and i just noticed you play south paw...how does that work for you haha...

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#19
Quote by silentdud
that actually wasn't nearly as good as the previous reviews said... the vocals in that song aren't hard to hit anyway... your timing was horrible.. the guitar part was was a mess.

no offense or anything b/c I'm a jack Johnson fanatic, but over all it could use alot of work... how long have you been playing?



get over it ya tight arse.. you do better..

Dude that kicked ass...it was awesome...covers are better when there not 100% the same...the little timing thign didnt sound too bad i thought
#20
The vocals were great,

Until later in the song, they started to get breathy and weird for a couple seconds.

Pitchy in some parts. Nothing you cant fix without a little pratice though.

Guitar sounded a little awkward on the mutes? They were too trebly or something.

The guitar was a tad bit distorted.

Great job.
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#21
Firstly, it sounded like the recording set-up was pretty spot-on- low noise, good EQ etc, although I can't be sure of this as this comp. has tiny little speakers but hey.

Secondly, you have a good voice for sure.

Thirdly- pffft small errors so what? That's why I record using software- I very rarely get it perfectly down in one take. I virtually always have to re-record some sections and relay them over the top.

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#22
Thanks a lot guys

Jables - haha i know it doesnt sound right at all but the tab i was reading said thats the beginning of the next part haha, i just doenst sound right, but he does go into a wierd jam thing at the part of the song, thanks for the crit though

Freemo, thanks for crit, yeah it was accidental, but my voice was getting tired haha oh well, thanks again

Maddogg Yeah I agree, I just cant get that ****ty muted sound to go away, ive tried a million eq settings, and strumming techniques... its just annoying now.. haha but i know what your saying, thanks for the crit

Mattskas, yeah i usually like to edit sections, but my voice was getting so tired, ive only been singing for one month so i just tried one timing it , i think i could maybe do a little better in some parts though, thanks for the crit