#1
A while back I posted the PowerTab for my band's first song. Everyone loved it and a few ideas flew around to help us with lyrics -- well our singer wrote them and wanted to see what everyone thought:

intro:
Go on, walk out that door leaving me here alone
I don't need you to make it on my own

verse 1:
I aint got a clue what it was you said
dont really know what the hell I did
and when your lights fade on down the road
I aint about to pick up that phone

chorus:
Cause when you say you love me
I was foolish to believe it
but im better off this way
for once in my life Im free....

verse 2:
Gazing at women without a slap to the head
Knowing the man inside was never dead
And with all the things I've ever done for you
I can finally live for myself

chorus

verse 3:
I almost miss the long, close nights
And I wont forget the all familiar fights
but Im better off today then Ive ever been
for once I can live my way

chorus

solo

verse 4:
maybe I'll regret this down the line
but im not feeling so bad this time
this is my coming out party
and it feels like ive got a new lease on life

chorus etc..
#2
i take it you listen to a lot of tool and apc, the first verse line remindes me of eulogy from tool and the better off this way reminds me of passive from apc. nice job.
When the power of love conquers the love of power, the world will know peice- hendrix
#4
our singer revamped some of the words:: what do you think...?

intro:
Go on, walk out that door and leave me standing here alone
'Cause I don't need you I can make it on my own

verse 1:
I aint got a clue what it was that you said
dont really know what the hell I did
I know that when you walk out that door
You wont be coming round no more
Gazing at women without a slap to my head
Knowing the man inside was never dead
And with all the things I've ever done for you
I can finally live my way

chorus:
Cause when you say you love me
I was foolish to believe it
but im better off this way

And now that I'm independent
I can think how I truly feel
Oh baby, you've set me free

verse 2:
I almost miss the long, close nights we had
And I wont forget fights, how bad
but Im better off today then Ive ever been
for once I can live my way
maybe I'll regret this down the line
but im not feeling too bad this time
this is my coming out party
and it feels like a new lease on life

chorus

"kick ass" solo

chorus
#5
I think it needs a lot of work. it seems like however it is sung it will have no emotion. and try to refrain from words like aint and cause, they make you sound like a hick, of Puddle of Mud