#1
RH FACTOR

Can't conceive one
This womb holds none
Before I create
Placenta's destroyed
And consumed in the void

Kill this plague inside of me
An abortion that happened naturally

The child was lethal
The poison was fetal
Life doesn't compute
What is this disease?
We must execute

Kill this plague inside of me
An abortion that happened naturally

Here the lineage is cursed
To a cadaverous birth
A bioligical tomb
A living mausoleum
Masquerading as a womb

Kill this plague inside of me
An abortion that happened naturally
Last edited by themarsvolta at Nov 5, 2006,
#2
awesome
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#3
Very good, very sad, made me think,good metaphoricness,good lyrics,9 and a bit outta 10 from me =p i liked
"The child was lethal
The poison was fetal
Life doesn?t compute
What is this disease
We must execute


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#4
I love it... The lyrics are definatly above average, but the thing i really like about is that it really seems mean something to you. Good job. 8 outta 10, but that's good comeing from me because only the superhumanly awesome songs get 9's and 10's from me.
#5
Wow i really liked this. It was full of meaning and hidden meanings too. The piece flowed great and was simple and to the point.
#6
Wow... that was deep. No Joke. Good work! I like the flow and the topic like someone above said it seems to mean alot to you.
#7
Here the lineage is cursed
To a cadaverous birth
A bioligical tomb
A living mausoleum
Masqerading as a womb



really love this part
I haven't seen many of these themes around, so it's quite original imo

I have the feel that this is about someone with womb-canser (or whatever???)
and had a mis carriegge, probably wrong though?

The riming was good and didn't sound forced, only weird... but good!

nice job