#1
I looked through the FAQ, I didn't see anything referring to this in it, and I'm leaning towards the "This isn't allowed" side. But I will delete it or you can close it if it is indeed not allowed. This thread will explain the reason for all of it:
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=361919
I just thought I'd post it for the hell of it. Just to be on the safe side, this song was originally written and recorded by Metallica on the 2003 album "St. Anger."

Original:

If I could have my wasted days back,
Would I use them to get back on track?
Stop to warm at karmas burning,
Or Look ahead, but keep on turning.

Do I have the strength
To know how I'll go?
Can I find it inside to deal with what I shouldn't know?

Could I have my wasted days back?
Would I use them to get back on track.

You live it or lie it!
You live it or lie it!

My lifestyle determines my deathstyle!
My lifestyle determines my deathstyle!

Keep searchin
Keep on searchin
This search goes on
This search goes on
Keep searchin.
Keep on searchin.
This search goes on.
This search goes on.

Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock
Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock
Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock
Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock
I've worn out always being afraid
An endless stream of fear that i've made
Treading water full of worry
This frantic tick tick talk of hurry

Do I have the strength
To know how I'll go?
Can I find it inside to deal with what I shouldn't know?

I've worn out always being afraid
An endless stream of fear that i've made

You live it or lie it!
You live it or lie it!

My lifestyle determines my deathstyle!
My lifestyle determines my deathstyle!

Keep searchin.
Keep on searchin.
This search goes on.
This search goes on.
Keep searchin.
Yeah, Keep on searchin.
This search goes on.
on and on!

Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock
Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock
Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock
Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock

Do I have the strength
To know how I'll go?
Can I find it inside to deal with what I shouldn't know?

Do I have the strength
To know how I'll go?
Can I find it inside to deal with what I shouldn't know?

Oh My lifestyle (Birth is Pain) determines my deathstyle!
a rising tide (Life is Pain) that pushes to the other side!
My lifestyle (Death is Pain) determines my deathstyle!
a rising tide (Its All The Same) that pushes to the other side!

Keep searchin
Keep on searchin
This search goes on
on and on
Keep searchin.
Keep on searchin.
This search goes on.
on and on.

Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock
Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock
Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock
Frantic tick tick tick tick tick tock


*Slightly* Altered version:

If I could have my fifteen bucks back,
I'd never listen to this asscrack
I don't care about that necklace
But Krispy Kreme just leaves me breathless

Yes, I'd like the glazed,
With jelly-filled holes.
Also with a box of the sprinkled, and a milk to go.

Could you put that in a small sack?
Why aren't you reading all of this back?

You're fresh out of donuts?!
You're fresh out of donuts?!

"We're out of glazed. Try again another day."
"We're out of glazed. Try again another day."

Gone searching
Doughnut searching
Not a single one
Not a single one
Keep searching
Keep on searching
Not a single one
Not a single one

Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop
Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop
Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop
Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop

I wish this album never was made
I'd rather watch a fat kid get laid
It sounds like sh!t when you bang on trash cans
If you sold donuts you'd have more fans

I demand some glazed
With jelly-filled holes
Serve some fvcking food here, before I have to slap a hoe

Don't tell James I'm getting pissed off
He'll try to turn me off of Smirnoff

I'm searching for donuts!
I'm searching for donuts!

"We don't have glazed. Try again another day."
"We don't have glazed. Try again another day."

Still searching
Keep on searching
Donuts are gone
Donuts are gone
Keep searching
Tired of searching
Where have they gone?
Why have they gone?

Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop
Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop
Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop
Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop

If I don't get my glazed
With jelly-filled holes
I'll rape you in the ass while you're licking clean my toilet bowl

If I don't get my glazed
With jelly-filled holes
I'll go tell Metallica 'bout Napster and the songs you stole

Out of glazed? (Had to sue) A knuckle sandwhich on its way.
There is no lack. (To get ours too) You're hiding them way in the back.
Out of glazed? (Save our name) A knuckle sandwhich on its way.
There is no lack. (And keep our fame) You're hiding them way in the back.

Through searching
No more searching
Donuts are gone
Donuts are gone
No searching
Tired of searching
Where have they gone?
Why have they gone?

Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop
Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop
Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop
Hungry, growl growl growl growl growl stop
Last edited by DanimalCrackers at May 18, 2006,
#2
Loooooooooong song. I like parts of it. Didn't like the first too lines. Seemed forced. But I did really like the flow of all of the first four lines, so that makes up for it. I don't like the tick tock part, but I know people who would like that kind of stuff.

You live it or lie it? Doesn't make sense.

Like this:

"Keep searchin
Keep on searchin
This search goes on
on and on
Keep searchin.
Keep on searchin.
This search goes on.
on and on."

I can hear it with a cool bassline, and a nice drive on the drums.. Sweet.

Ok, song. 6/10 for me.

can you crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=361710
#3
Oh, damn.... You didn't even write that song? Dude, don't post stuff like that.. I'm sure it says somehting in the FAQ about everything having to be origional.
#4
^wasnt it supposed to be a parody of "Frantic"? im prety sure hes already explained himself

anyway i thought it was funny, but not that funny