#1
well...i'm back. Lately, I haven't been writing poetry or songs as much as I have short stories; but this is an exception. I wrote this recently. It's short. I'll let you find the meaning.


Change

I dream of beauty;
As to be forever bold,
Wavering
Not in question
To defeat,
But rather
To say to the world
With a new
Humility,
Look
At
Me.
I?ve done it.



#4
i loved it.

i'm guessing that it's about plastic surgery or body modification
The trouble with nude dancing is that not everything stops moving when the music does.

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#5
Quote by Green_Fox
i loved it.

i'm guessing that it's about plastic surgery or body modification



you got it
#6
wow that was really cleverly written..well done. It was short but you got the message pretty clearly...
Quote by Lord_Of_Dance.

I never understood why a girl would take a boner as a bad thing "Oh no, your attracted to me, you sick wanker." :\ x


Quote by Nelsean
Im saying this the straightest way possible, but...

I'd have sexual intercourse with your anus.
#8
I liked it, abeit it being short and using somewhat "simple" language. I think you probably (read: definately) did that on purpose. Its a sort of wierd poem...my guess would be that you wanted to lose a certain amount of weight and accomplished it, or something similar? While reading it I could definately "see" what you were saying in my minds eye. It was a nice read, thanks

I won't ask you to crit back becuase I haven't posted anything But I may, because I'm starting to like this forum, and have always loved writing poetry.
To see a World in a Grain of Sand
And a Heaven in a Wild Flower
Hold Infinity in the palm of your hand
And Eternity in an hour