#1
My first post! I have started writing something and it is four (short) lines long so far. Feel free to tear it apart, it will only get better that way .


Look into the tainted water
Tell me what you see
You see yourself, but not yourself
A bitter parody
#2
Looks good to me. Do a chorus and add it to your poem and you will have a song
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feed a pigeon bicarbonate of soda, let it swell up for a while. then feed it to the dogs and

BOOM head shot!

(pigeons explode after having bicarbonate of soda, they cant fart. stupid pigeons.)
#3
Hey, I liked it, nice four lines. Would like to see more, keep working on it.

Feel free to post a line or two about the my new one, top link from my sig.