#1
"Road Trip"

Intro:We pack up our tiny car
we're ready to hit the road
we start up the engine
we probally won't get far

verse:We're gonna have a good time
we don't have much more than a dime
we'll party all night
and we'll do it right

chorus:we're goin on a road trip
goin to have fun
we're goin on a road trip
the party goes on till we see the sun

verse:we know how to have fun
we won't stop untill its done
doin all the stuff we've dreamed of
this is what i really love

chorus:we're goin on a road trip
goin to have fun
we're goin on a road trip
the party goes on till we see the sun

outro:goin on a road trip
goin on a road trip
goin on a road trip
~gtrfrk


founder of the dunlop pick fan club


RIP Roger "Syd" Barrett


"Let the good times roll"
Last edited by gtrfrk123 at May 21, 2006,
#2
i thought it was basic but could be longer verses but it wasnt bad pretty awesome could you crit my song forever night stand
#3
its ok maybe each sentence could be more in rythm with each other if im making sense
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#4
the outro sounds kinda like the chorus. just end it like ur already driving. and we repeated sounds redundant. "The party goes on till we see the sun." that really got me! just vary how u start off sentences and ull have it made!