#1
well, at the moment i just jotted this down, so please tell me what you think.

My world

I sit here in my world everything is my way
that?s right my way, the way I like it!
When I step into yours, the pain, the fear.
just come rushing into me.

Chorus
why cant everything be like it is in my world!
In mine its perfect no breaks, no pain, just perfect X 2

The difference is just too much for my mind
If I could, I would take you back to mine
Then you would see, my dreams
then they would become yours

Chorus
why cant everything be like it is in my world!
In mine its perfect no breaks, no pain, just perfect

My world (my world) your world (you world)
Don?t get near, but the thoughts are close
Come with me, I shall ask once more (once more)
Come with me (come with me)

Chorus
why cant everything be like it is in my world!
In mine its perfect no breaks, no pain, just perfect X2

Outro
MY WORLD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ITS MY WORLD!!!!!
MY WORLD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ITS MY WORLD!!!!
that?s all!
#2
im not really a big fan of those kinds of songs, i think someone like avril lavigne might sing this. and i can't give a good crit and all, id just give it 6/10.. sorry if im being an asshole, maybe i could give you a helpful crit next time though.

til your next song. ^^;