#1
Verse 1
With three hands
Pointing every direction
It slowly ticks your life away

As the hands go in circles
Your time winds down
And you know your not here to stay

With one more ?tick?
You could be gone
And you realise, you lived life wrong

All your days
Wasted home alone
Living in fear of dying alone


Chorus
The Clocks are ticking your life away
It?s only a matter of time, until you go
So live your life full everyday
Don?t regret the directions you chose to follow

Verse 2
The doorway ahead
Has endless possibilities
Pass through the opening with non-stop thoughts

Step through the gate
Before it swings shut
Cutting you off, leaving you bare, it locks

Chorus
The doors are shutting your life away
It?s only a matter of time, until you go
So live your life full everyday
Don?t regret the directions you chose to follow

Bridge
Everyone thinks they have forever
But forever?s a harsh reality
Before you know it you time has come
And you become a long lost memory

Chorus
The Clocks are ticking your life away
It?s only a matter of time, until you go
So live your life full everyday
Don?t regret the directions you chose to follow

Your life?s getting shorter everyday
It?s only a matter of time until you go
Don?t let the doors and clock shut and tick you away
And turn you into distant memories


Crits are greatly appreciated, adn I'll crit yours if you woulld like as well.
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Last edited by greendayguitar at May 21, 2006,
#3
classic emo, if that is what you were going for. The overally plain words didn't do much for me, but the structure of the song works. Not real big on changes words of a chorus, but in this case, I think it could work. Just a few things that really stuck out ... I wouldn't rhyme alone to alone ... and I'd stick with a formula and stay with it. Basically, decide how long the lines should be, and stay with the same count. Otherwise, you'll have to post the actual music so we can all get a feel for the flow. As it stands now, I got confused a little. Overall, good work.
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#4
i thought it was emo but not my stuff but i say its good for you and id change the chorus could you crit my song forever night stand