#1
Alright everyone, so after almost forever, I've returned with some more "poetry"!
(Which is really used loosly, also fitted with SPAM on my attempt!)

So here we go.

Gray


Formed together
Two shades
And one hate
To make one fine line of solid

So gray

Without sanction
So very long ago
Celebration to the art
Of the present

So gray

Granted as a dream
A wish comes true
Forever the visuals are left to be
So gray

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Quite short compared to what I normally write.
Well, please tell me what you think and feel free to give an interpretation, I'd really appreciate some constructive criticism!
Thanks!

-FinestImagery
#2
I liked this very much, it was short and sweet and to the point which gives is more strength then if it was long. 9/10 from me bud!

Please crit me!
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=361020
#3
I think it sounds awesome, but does gray represent something or are you just writing about a color? not trying to flame you or anything, just trying to understand a little more.

please crit mine, http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=363777
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#4
Quote by Wilber
I think it sounds awesome, but does gray represent something or are you just writing about a color? not trying to flame you or anything, just trying to understand a little more.

please crit mine, http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=363777


thanks for the response.
Gray represents sort of "unity" of people of all races and such...
I wrote this last night in about 10 minutes (is it apparent? lol)
after my friend was racially discriminated against after he tried to sit down at a table which they did not let him...lots of rude remarks, names and such towards him.
It hurt to see that we're all still so prejudiced (though in my eyes prejudice will never cease, racial or general...prejudice against a race, and then prejudice against racist people...never ending cycle).
Sort of more like a wish, for everything to be "gray".
Not black or white.
Just a shade between them.

Thanks for the response, by the way!

-FinestImagery
#5
Fantastic. Really good...differant bit of work. I like it lots, i wish i could write stuff like this!
I like how youve used gray as a metaphor, thats awesome.
9/10 from me!!
Can you crit mine? The link is in my sig =p
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