#1
I scramble like a hog on ice to discover new life in these pages
The search for my god has ended with this lengthy book; it took ages
I fumble to and fro finding wordy polysyllabic symbols
In hopes that my intellectual peers won't label me an imbecile

Shiva, thank Ra for my thesaurus and stuff
Without it I wouldn't sound pretentious enough
Shiva, thank Ra for my thesaurus and stuff
Without it I wouldn't sound pretentious enough

Neanderthals begging to be free, tired of being uncivilized and hairy
All they need to do is buy a turtleneck and get a rhyming dictionary
Take no prisoners and take no words that you can say in one breath
Then vaguely allude with some dark imagery to your physical or spiritual death

Shiva, thank Ra for my thesaurus and stuff
Without it I wouldn't sound pretentious enough
Shiva, thank Ra for my thesaurus and stuff
Without it I wouldn't sound pretentious enough

Eagerly racing a panda's soul to the ER
That's just irrelevant enough to make me a star
Movement halts; Father Time's crippled penis
That's just irrelevant enough to make me a genius
#DTWD
Last edited by primusfan at May 21, 2006,
#2
wow...definately some interesting rhymes in there. Very good vocabulary and nice twist on words. It flowed really well and none of the lines really seemed force. The chorus is really catchy too. Nice piece here.
#3
I like the rhyming, defintally not your typical rhymes. It is very smooth and all of the lines mesh nicely. each line has about the same amount of syllalbles then the line before making this a very enjoyable piece to read. 10/10

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#4
i like the flow of this its good...

but i think a lot of the rhymes could be better.

the stuff/enough sounds weak to me

and symbol/imbecile and finally genius/penis

not a bad piece at all but i think the rhymes could be better


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#6
Dude, this is unique. I love it. Especially the pretentious part. Nice work, keep it up. Crit mine "Baby" if you get a chance.
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