#1
Marzipan

Sorting through the pieces of me
Unwinding the ropes binding my soul to the floor
Is there an enemy, or is it just me?
Should I unlock my door, or stay right where I am?

How would I know what to say, what to think?
My mind is wild inside, am I sick?
I haven?t felt this way for awhile, but I feel so weak
Am I the antidote? Or am I the disease?


Remember when you asked me what?s wrong?
Remember when I told you I?m fine?
Remember you told me that you thought that I?m not?
All I remember then is the wind blown through your hair
Then I realized that you were holding my hand
I felt good then

Sitting in the ashes of my old life
Do I have the power to make it right
I?m afraid of what?s gonna happen next
But here you are again, being my friend

When I?m with you I cannot think, and when I speak
All the words turn into slurred speech
And suddenly I think about your face
Sweat forms on my head, my heart begins to race


Remember when you asked me what?s wrong?
Remember when I told you I?m fine?
Remember you told me that you thought that I?m not?
All I remember then is the wind blown through your hair
Then I came to realize you were holding me close
I could get used to that

When I lied, I betrayed your trust
The taste of marzipan, still in my mouth
Can you forgive the one you had to tolerate?
When you touch my lips, it makes me feel so strange

Hey you, sad eyed-girl
Would you mind if I shared this view?
I didn?t realize how much that I loved you
And now I know, you loved me too.
Genocidal club #3. i was promised respect....

Cuando moría; Vi todo cerca de mí, todo lejos de mí, y todo adentro de mí. El cielo fue abierto, y en oblivio, me olvidé.
#4
I enjoyed this piece I love the rhymes and imagery, it's something easily relateable to and i think it will make a damn good song. 9/10

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#5
Quote by theanticipated
okay...it seems good but the first verse is stupid because it rhymes me with me


they way its sung it doesn't rhyme me with me.

Quote by themarsvolta
Just one question, what is Marzipan?


sweet almond paste.

Quote by chloroformkisme
I enjoyed this piece I love the rhymes and imagery, it's something easily relateable to and i think it will make a damn good song. 9/10


Thanks a lot! And it is a song, i could post a link, but i dont know if that's allowed, and i'll for sure get to yours.
Genocidal club #3. i was promised respect....

Cuando moría; Vi todo cerca de mí, todo lejos de mí, y todo adentro de mí. El cielo fue abierto, y en oblivio, me olvidé.
#6
Isn't Marzipan the girlfriend of Home Star Runner, from Homestar Runner.com. Sorry if I'm way off here.
#7
Quote by Ifoughtthelaw42
Isn't Marzipan the girlfriend of Home Star Runner, from Homestar Runner.com. Sorry if I'm way off here.


could be, but its also sweet almond paste.
Genocidal club #3. i was promised respect....

Cuando moría; Vi todo cerca de mí, todo lejos de mí, y todo adentro de mí. El cielo fue abierto, y en oblivio, me olvidé.
#8
Damm... for never seeing a peice of yours on here before, your making a great first impression. This song is amazing, indescribably amazing. Thats all I have to say. Thank you for your time.
If The Archers Bows Have Broken, Then I Hope To God They Know How To Fight.
#9
thanks i've been here for a loooooong time...i used to post a lot back in 2004...but now its only when I'm bored and online :-/
Genocidal club #3. i was promised respect....

Cuando moría; Vi todo cerca de mí, todo lejos de mí, y todo adentro de mí. El cielo fue abierto, y en oblivio, me olvidé.
#10
i thought it was a nice lil thingy you did there nice job
"I will not rest untill the noise has stopped"-Vishus
#11
haha thanks.
Genocidal club #3. i was promised respect....

Cuando moría; Vi todo cerca de mí, todo lejos de mí, y todo adentro de mí. El cielo fue abierto, y en oblivio, me olvidé.
#12
Funny how that song describes many feelings that I've had lately..
Really touching mate:P
Hell I really miss that girl..
#13
that was the point of the song
Genocidal club #3. i was promised respect....

Cuando moría; Vi todo cerca de mí, todo lejos de mí, y todo adentro de mí. El cielo fue abierto, y en oblivio, me olvidé.