#1
I've been playing the guitar for a year and a half or so. Starting to break into song writing, please give constructive crit. thanks

IRONY

Catch me,
I?m falling,
I?m falling,
And I don?t know who you are,

Slowly,
You?ve scraped my life away,
And now only you remain,
Don?t leave me now under this setting sun,

You said you loved me,
And I belonged to you,
But you never truly belonged to me,
Where is the irony,

Time has stretched,
And we stood there before going our separate ways,
And as the tears ran down my face,

You said you loved me,
And I belonged to you,
But you never truly belonged to me,
Where is the irony,

Now it?s years later,
I?ve fallen and hit ground zero,
And you never caught me,

And you still love me,
And I am free of you,
But now your bound to me,
Where is the Irony?
#2
i think that it has potential. i think it should be more subtle. overall, it was decent but cliche but it definitely has potential. you just need to work on your wording, in my opinion. good job. keep up the good work!
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