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All of the songs I have seem to be about my rotten, depressing, heart-breaking break up Go figure. Please, constructive critiscism only Thanks!


Alone

I?m standing in the rain,
And hiding from this pain,
The mask I once war is lost,

Where have you gone,
I?m all alone, (all alone)
My salvation has gone, (salvation)
And I?m all alone,

You were my redemption,
My angel in the dark,
Lighthouse in this deception,
Guide through this deserted park,

Where have you gone,
I?m all alone, (all alone)
My salvation?s gone, (salvation)
And I?m all alone,

This damp darkness clings,
And yet its so welcoming,
But I still fight it for you,

So where have you gone,
?Cause I?m all alone,
You were my salvation,
Now I?m all alone?
(x2)


Don?t Know Why

Lying in my bed,
Heart pounding,
Head throbbing,
Life fading away,

And I don?t know why,
But as my life seeps away,
All I see is your face,
And all I want is for you,
To forget?.me,

Time moves on,
Masks falling,
Walls breaking,
Conscience slipping away,

And I don?t know why,
But as my life seeps away,
All I see is your face,
And all I want is for you,
To forget?me,

And I realize,
Life goes on,
And the bleeding stops,
But I?m still without you,

And I don?t know why,
That as life fills me up,
All I want is you,
And all I want is for you,
To remember?me.
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I like it, actually. I don't know why you posted two songs in one post, but hey, it's cool with me, they were both decent.

The thing I like about your style is its simplicity. I could definitely see you putting in a lot of feeling while you sung and played guitar. And since you are Guitar Guy Scot, I'm guessing that was your intention.

Plus, I feel your pain. Break-ups freakin' suck man, but they inspire good material.


Nice work, bro.
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