#1
Heres something i wrote a few days ago....acoustic rock song...please crit

Hey there remember me?
ive come back to haunt your memory
like a fistfull of summer
and a handful of rain
i will never feel like this again
im the person you knew at school
that scared person who just wasnt cool
the one who cried to sleep at night
the one who never got it right

chorus

and i wont be needed to apologise
for all your stupid selfish lies
sorry is never easy to say
fifteen years wasted away
and its funny how just a few years ago
you pushed me around it just goes to show
your sorry now im sorry now
its just a word you dont know how to say

Lets take a trip down memory lane
im stronger now i can stand the pain
you useless cow you wrecked my life
and every word cut like a knife
i dont want to have to run away
or hide myself all over again
im not that stupid its easy to see
you just wanted to be me

chorus


thats what ive got so far...
#2
Hey hey...great song! I really enjoyed it! Some great lines, especially the first stanza.
Hey there remember me?
ive come back to haunt your memory
like a fistfull of summer
and a handful of rain
i will never feel like this again

KICKS ASS!
However nearer the end of the song it began to lack abit, it just wasnt as strong.
Still awesome though! Il give it.....a.....9/10 because it rawks and cuz im a nice girl!
I really need crits on mine, the link is in my sig.
=P
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#3
first few line are outragously great. I loved it. Not sure though if the rhyme for rain and again is there is that's what your after. But I guess it would depend on how it was sung. Which brings me to my next point, how on earth can this me an acoustic rock song? I'm very interested, so if you actually put paper to music, please email it to me. One that really stuck out ... school/cool is not so great. LOL.

and i wont be needed to apologise
for all your stupid selfish lies

^another great line (but it's apologize). And also, great ending for the second verse. Come full circle. Nice.

Here's mine: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=362757 if you care to crit back
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