#1
my attempt at something a bit psychedelic, any crit is welcome

V1
Walking in the concrete jungle
Clouds suddenly fall from the sky
In spite of this I carry on with my journey
No part of me ever wonders why
Chorus
The river flows on around me
The currents pull me under
I let myself be carried
To the land of liquorice and thunder
V2
I feel as though I'm invisible
Like the shadows in their eyes
No one ever looks at me
But I see the tigers flying in their minds
Chorus
V3
Swimming in the sea of stars
Tingles run up my spine
I search all around me
In this there is no one of my kind
Chorus
V4
I find myself on the road back home
When golden hail rises from the floor
I run and look for safety
But no one will let me past their door
Chorus
Founder of Jaco society

[22:08:23] <Confusius> I wish I was a bassist
[22:08:26] <Confusius> you fuckers look cool


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Last edited by sinan90 at May 27, 2006,
#2
this is cool psychadelic imagery, and flow but i won't get on ur case about the spelling error of their. u used ur imagination and that's a good thing to have especially if ur a song writer.