#1
The ring tone screams
Hollow pitch?s into my ears
This conversation ended
With a loud shout of fear
I guess its easier now
If I could hold you here
But silence is golden
And blood flows from ears

I hate you for what you did
But I love you for who you were
Now do you see this crisis?
Is it still just one big blur
I believed everything you spoke
But which one do u prefer
A broken heart attack victim
Or a deadly transfer?

The sounds of silence
Rings inside my minds
When you do fight
Who do you fight with?

I tried to call you again
But this line is dead
I dialed these numbers in
But they are mislead
Into this confussion
But I lye here well spread
Am I going insane
Are these thoughts in my head?

I hate you more then ever
These words I hope you heed
You see you haven?t relised
Your all about greed
Stabbing my back with this
Just to watch my bleed
And now you pray for me
To sing you this creed

The sounds of silence
Rings inside my minds
When you do fight
Who do you fight with?

I cant understand what?s happening
I wake up to this pillow
A tear rolls down my cold cheek
Not much short of a billow
I look around this dark room
Just to see a mirror reflecting myself.


there it is, see if u understand whats happenin
MindFire!
#2
hmmm very interesting.
I wouldn't change anything on this except there are a few grammatical errors, as well as spelling errors.
Otherwise, nice work.
Please crit mine?
"Never-ending"
In my list of posts.
Thanks!
FinestImagery