#1
charcoal sketches on the wall
two dimensions that is all
blackest hair and blackest eyes
blackest mind and blackest lies

charcoal sketches in the book
you want truth, well then just look
see yourself, turn the page
fashioned by the master sage

charcoal sketches on the floor
that's not enough, you want more
fading lines as dark as coal
leave the room, go find your soul

charcoal sketches on the shelf
buy them with your tarnished wealth
splattered now with bloody pus
reach out and sieze them you must
charcaol sketches
#2
It is decent. I don't really see this being a song of any type, but it works for a poem. I don't know what you were trying for.
#3
bloody brilliant, except maybe;
splattered now with bloody pus
reach out and sieze them you must
charcaol sketches
but clever rest of lyrics.
#4
It's a nice poem. There are somethings here I picked up on thought-

charcoal sketches on the floor
that's not enough, you want more
fading lines as dark as coal
leave the room, go find your soul

I feel this stanza is the weakest. The second line especially seems weaker compared to everything else.

charcoal sketches on the shelf
buy them with your tarnished wealth
splattered now with bloody pus
reach out and sieze them you must
charcaol sketches

I would suggest seperating the last line from this, just for effect. Also, lines 3 and 4 confuse me- they don't seem to belong in this poem. I get that it's supposed to be ann angreir (if thats the word) stanza, but it does eem out of place. And is that how seize is spelt?

Overall, 7/10. I enjoyed it.