#1
Lost in the backfire
Looking left,right and centre to make sure they're still
there
Still looking but not finding and it is causing greif,
See them in the corner of your eye,sigh of relief
But your still scared about losing the ones of which you
care.

Your holding them close now you don't want to let go
Squeezing them with all of your strength so hard they can't
breath,
Asking them, begging them, telling them they can not leave
Shouting at them, Screaming at them, Yelling at them, No No
No No

Bridge or short solo

There the ones you really desire
Without them you would simply die
But there lost in the backfire
And theres nothing you can do

There the ones you really desire
Without them you would simply die
But there lost in the backfire
And theres nothing you can do


thats it so far, let me know what you think
Just Bass me up!
#2
It's good. I enjoyed it, but I would recommend that if you are going to repeat the stanza at the end, make it a variation on it more than a straight repeat- just so that it doesn't get tedious.

Good stuff, keep it going.
#3
I was impressed by this. The flow was very unique. I agree with the above poster about the repitition of the last stanza. It would be best with at least a tempo change.