#1
: i used to know you face
but you came around, a disgrace
your eyes are bloodshot
the needle hangin from your vein
cuts tracing your mistakes
leading down to your hands

you cant take this
i cant help you
i tried for so many years
but these scars never fade

your mascara bleeds
lines trailing down your face
mixing with the torture
placed inside your eyes
your nose starts to bleed
cocaine flows rihgt back out

you cant take this
i cant help you
i tried for so many years
but these scars never fade

drugs and addictions
cuts right down your arms
your so ****ing stupid
learn from your mistakes


i will hav a look at urs. all good
MindFire!
#3
sounds too much like the papa roach version, the whole line "cocaine flows right back" seems a little forced. the whole concept is a little cliche, but the lines themselves arent that bad. just cliche.
and your friends over there, they love you three hits deep.
thats like four-hundred and twenty feet deeper than steep.
youre so fuckin lucky to be loved so steep.
so fuckin lucky to be dug so deep.
(you cant get out.)
#5
that would suck for the cocain to come back out, i guess you could just resnort it...
I guess you gotta write about politics to not be emo