#1
i wrote this in five minutes after reading the nolan whyte article

the worry

I felt like my life just ended
Even if I?m just starting
I spent a month worrying about her
Just because that moment of blindness
(chorus)
I even thought about a job
So I can pay all the bills my stupidity brought
But at the moment I couldn?t hold

We were having a fight
When she said it?s alright
Then I felt the burden went away
And in that moment I could move on
Last edited by FrancoSelf at May 31, 2006,
#2
what genre of music is this going to be?
It sounds like punk/emo.
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#3
Quote by noah22791
what genre of music is this going to be?
It sounds like punk/emo.



i don't know, maybe punk pop
#6
I felt like my life just ended
Even if I?m just starting
I spent a month worrying about her
Just because that moment of dumbness

As the user above me said, another word aside from "dumbness" should be in order...maybe change it to something such as "blindness" or something along those lines?

(chorus)
I even thought about a job
So I can pay all the bills my stupidity brought
But at the moment I couldn?t hold

We were having a fight
When she said it?s alright
Then I felt the burden went away
And in that moment I could move on
Interesting, but a bit too simple...elaborate, if possible!^^
All in all I liked it, but a bit too "simple" for my tastes.
However, different from most stuff on UG, which makes it stand out.
Keep it up, looking forward to seeing more from you in the future!

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