Well, I'm not the best at criticizing, but there's really not anything I found wrong here. It seemed like it was made very well, a lovely tone, and came out souding beautifully, overall I think it sounded great.
hey man i can tell you put a lot of effort into this, it's fantastic quality, and the harmony works extremely well...a few things i could say is turn the kick up on the set, and maybe get a more steady of a beat going....however other than that i have nothing to say but really great job, nice heavy distortion, and way to be creative!
Hey Warren, this was awesome, they should play this version at sporting events.

*salutes the flag*

btw, what tab are you using?