#1
Yea this is my first time posting anywhere, and basically one of my first songs. I don't mind criticism, so give me any pointers you want to.


Love is a Saturday Night in a Motel

You walk down the aisle with a liers smile
Pass your family, friends an unforgettable child
They love you so, but i know the truth
A bottle of Jack and a man lying next to you

She calls for him late one night
He brings the booze and the feeling of doing right
She says, "Baby, I really want you."
"Then let me show you what your man won't be able to do"

chorus
Cheaters win, the losers always make it
Come on girl, tell me how you fake it
12:45 still not past the hour
Only one time, but now your feeling sour

He sits at home waiting for the *****
12:30 is so late for working in a clothing store
He has a feeling that something might be wrong
But she loves him so much, oh wait sorry wrong song

Chorus

She Looks at him Lovingly
(lies keep them together)
She touches him gently
(the truth is overrated)
He holds back his feelings
(one night is enough)
They say I do
(For a life of pain)

Chorus
Last edited by Stairwaytofloyd at May 31, 2006,
#2
He sits at home waiting for the *****
12:30 is so late for working in a clothing store
He has a feeling that something might be wrong
But she loves him so much, oh wait sorry wrong song

was def. my favorite part do u have some chords or anytihng for that??
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#4
heh, he sits at home waiting for the BLANK
I guess you gotta write about politics to not be emo