#1
Another Day Like Yesterday by: William Sitze
(chorus is underlined)

looking left
looking right
story's told
end of night

calling you
no where near
your trying to
disappear

Another day dowwwn
Another one is near
I can feel Youuu
Like You're almost here

So go ahead, nowww
Like you just don't care
I can feel Youuu
Like You're almost here
<-----(chorus)

i get the point
now i leave
we try so hard
desperately

think it once
think it twice
remember when
you were nice?

falling up
falling down
go to bed
with a frown

hold your hand
let it go
end of night
story's told

(chorus)

jumping out
jumping in
try so hard
just to win

now it's clear
all i see
in my dreams
you and me

kill me soon
kill me now
seem's like you're
always down

bright as night
dark as day
this is it
you must beleive

(chorus)

jump through glass
jump through walls
try so hard
just to fall

see you laugh
see you smile
wish you'd stay
just awhile

(chorus)(whispered)
I'm Back.


[STAY THIRSTY, MY FRIENDS]


When Autumn comes, it doesn't ask
It just walks in where it left you last
You never know when it starts
Until there's fog inside the glass around your summer heart
#2
well, the verses are brief, but i liked them. and i see u repeat things on the 1st two lines of the verses.. that's ok too.

bright as night
dark as day
this is it
you must beleive


this is the only fault i can spot so far, the rhyming scheme of this stanza is different from all the others.

but i don't get the whole point of the song... sorry...
#3
one fish
two fish
red fish
blue fish

... that's what it reminded me of LOL. But then again, Dr. Suess was a genius. So take from that what you will.
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#4
one fish
two fish
red fish
blue fish

... that's what it reminded me of LOL. But then again, Dr. Suess was a genius. So take from that what you will.


Hehe. Nice observation.

Like previously said, the verses seem brief but work. If the musics good then so would this. But we're critting the lyrcis here. I didn't take too the chorus much, seemed a bit cliche to me. 7/10.

If you could crit back, "Escapade" is in my sig. Many thanks.