#1
tell me what you think, weither your like it or not or any other suggestions. just be honest. (its just the first half)

my expression has been melted,
my pride has been stolen,
still, i will not let you tear this down
and further push my decadence

while i slowly climb away
you break and beat me
drown me in your mediocrity
and in peices i lay
once more i am whole
once more i am broken

like a coward i rot in silence
a dirty spinless hypocrite
i must rebuild what you've destroyed
and slowly tear it away again

while i slowly climb away
you break and beat me
drown me in your mediocrity
and in peices i lay
once more i am whole
once more i am broken......
When the power of love conquers the love of power, the world will know peice- hendrix
#3
I liked it dude, Mabe rework a few of the lines and you got yourself a pretty solid song! keep it up and post the modefied version!!
...:::The Master Chief :::...
#5
its very violent and forecful, but it doesn't seem coherent to me. is it about the daily struggle of putting up with some bitch that breaks and beats you, but through this beating or whatever it is you become whole by being broken? and this person isn't living up to their full potential? if you were going for semi-intelligible lyrics that dance around a point without making it, but leave it up to the listener to decide, you did a good job.
#6
Quote by Captain Face
rework what lines would you say



Maybe the last verse and the second, It seems a little random
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