#1
very simple, cliche, my most cliche poem/song ever, but if love is cliche then cliches are great. Crit for Crit, (you dont really have to crit, just feedback i guess) just leave links and thanks in advanced


Forever

Every day you?re gone,
Is another week I die
And if you leave forever
I?ll be kissing you from the sky

Everywhere you are
Is just the place for me
And if you stay there forever
Forever is what we will be

Forever in my heart you will stay,
Even if you walk away
I just hope you keep a piece of me
Forever in your memory

Anywhere you go
Please take me with
To the moon or much further
You I just want to kiss

Any love you have
Is the only love I need
Wish it to last forever
Or further than the eye can see

Forever in my heart you will stay,
Even if you walk away
I just hope you keep a piece of me
Forever in your memory

Eternal elation is you and I
Euphoric love, greater than the sky
Ecstatic are the times spent with you
Am I crazy to think that I?d say I do?
anybody wanna put anything here just let me know
#3
wow, thats really good. i like.
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#4
hey thanks guys/gals and hahahahahahahahha the laughter is intended for amy's comment on my cliche thing. but thanks for reading. i appreciate it.
anybody wanna put anything here just let me know
#6
Great sound with this.
Really liked it, but you should sing the chorus again to end off?
#7
wow.....that was really nice......i like how u had ryhmes in and out
kinda like u abanded them and just wrote what u felt instead just
trying to write some nice rymhes.....I also felt a kind of 'rich' language
thing going on as i read this but that was what made me keep reading it
so overall a really good poem/song! 8/10