#1
I wrote this along with like 15 other pieces yesterday after an emotional breakdown, it sucks but I put it here to be critted hoping that perhaps after some help it could become usable. Please help me on this one, crit for crit and all that jazz. It needs a lot of help.
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Waking up to pain again
Emotional and physical and violent all the same
Even though these scars on my legs can't atone for this
I do it still and hope one day to never feel again

Chorus:
And it's true this time
I've finally lost my mind
I don't know what to do
I don't think I really ever knew
I need some help desperately
But no one will be there for me

Looking out a window seeing summer bare
Wishing for a crystal snowflake blanket to be there
Wishing for a lot these days or so it seems to me
Wishing for another chance to try and be complete

Bridge:
And this one's for you, no denying that.
I'm done trying to hide it, you know the truth anyway.
So sorry for the pain I've caused, but try to understand
That it's been so hard to try and take this one last stand.

{chorus}

This is what I feel is right I guess
It just seems so damn wrong to me
But it's done now and I can be free
And now I'm sure that I'm a little bit less

And it's true this time
I've finally lost my mind
I don't know what to do
I don't think I really ever knew
I've lost myself entirely
Can someone tell me, where I can find, the other half of me?