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Kept sacred in my heart and mind,
I'll never forget the ties that bind,

The endless routine, And simplicity of our hearts,
The endless route, we'll never know where it starts.

And the word that describes this bittersweet taste,
I'm not sure if it's a mistake, or just pure waste.

God has given me something of which I'm not aware,
An aura perhaps? But something that's fixated your stare.

I'm not sure where we're headed, Or where we will go,
But where ever this thing takes us, We'll have something to show.

Kept sacred in my thoughts and in my eyes,
I'll never forget the lies that bind.

The endless routine, and the complexity of your mind,
The endless route, and no red lights or stop signs.

And the word that describes this bittersweet taste,
I'm not sure if it's an accident, or just fake.

God has given us something of which we're not aware,
A trap perhaps? But something that's conjured this glare.

I'm not sure where we're headed, Or where it will go,
But where ever this thing takes you, You'll have no way to know.
#2
Quote by dragon1604
Kept sacred in my heart and mind,
I'll never forget the ties that bind,

The endless routine, And simplicity of our hearts,
The endless route, we'll never know where it starts.

Simple but effective. I would elaborate a bit more if I were you.

And the word that describes this bittersweet taste,
I'm not sure if it's a mistake, or just pure waste.

I think this line is very good, well-executed and powerful.

God has given me something of which I'm not aware,
An aura perhaps? But something that's fixated your stare.

Don't dig the God refrence (not Christian), and I don't know if I would keep it in there, but it's your song.

I'm not sure where we're headed, Or where we will go,
But where ever this thing takes us, We'll have something to show.

This bit seems re-hashed from various love songs and corny. I'd change it up.

Kept sacred in my thoughts and in my eyes,
I'll never forget the lies that bind.

Once again, effective and it works.

The endless routine, and the complexity of your mind,
The endless route, and no red lights or stop signs.

Clever rhyming - I like this.

And the word that describes this bittersweet taste,
I'm not sure if it's an accident, or just fake.

Eh, it is a tad bit confusing. I might re-word it.

God has given us something of which we're not aware,
A trap perhaps? But something that's conjured this glare.

I'm not sure where we're headed, Or where it will go,
But where ever this thing takes you, You'll have no way to know.

The last stanza is extremley cliche, definetly change it.



Overall, it's ok - some parts a little to cliche and cheesy, some parts very effective. Keep writing though!

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