#1
This is just a short piece i wrote about a friend. I havnt written anything new for quite a while so any crits would be appreciated. Leave a link.

A Faith More Worthy

Each time you carve your name into the dying tree,
A leaf will fall, as they were made too
Taking with it honour
And leaving the branches naked and defiled, as they deserve.
So next time, take from it a wooden cross
To add to your collection
That will withstand the seasons and your unjustified tears.
#3
It needs more depth in my opinion.

It's like someone wrote it trying to sound young and simple, like romantic poetry, but it needs some backbone.

Maybe better language which links to other stuff.

Becuase this kind of poetry comes up alot.

So you need a good standard.
#5
It's really good up until the "So next time" It's like a sudden pause in the middle of it.

A leaf will fall, as they were made too

It either needs to be "leaves will fall", or "as it was made to**". Your singular and plural are mixed up.

And leaving the branches naked and defiled, as they deserve.

I don't like the "as they deserve" on the end, it seems as if it was randomly placed just on the end of a line. I like how it's deserving of death, but, add it in somewhere else.

You've got potential.