#1
hey this is my first ever song and im not very good with free verse lyrics yet as im sure youll soon see but thanks for reading.


Its ok to not know where your going
Its ok to not know what to do
If you take just one step twoards him
Then he will take two steps to you

I know it is har being someone
Diffrent from all the rest
But if you can find that someone
I think youll be at your best

Verse
Im soo tired of being all alone
I cant fight these battles on my own
I just need someone to talk to
Just need someone who cares
On the nights im at my worst
On the nights that no one dares

It takes time to know where your going
Give it time and youll know what to do
As long as you always remeber
That its all up to you


If anyone has any idea how to help me develope some better lyric skills id be really intrested
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Last edited by jrthegreat91 at Jun 4, 2006,
#2
I think it's pretty good. the first two stanzas could fit a 12 bar blues format (listening to sum Yardbirds right now, in case ur wondering, "wtf"?)

rhymes sound natural, has good rythm. the last bit needs some work, tho

EDIT: nevermind, the last bit sounds fine. it's the middle part ("verse") seems out of place.

I think it'd be a nice idea to turn this into a blues song, since it fits so well. But it's up to you really...

idea:
Im soo tired of being all alone
I cant fight these battles on my own
I just need someone to talk to
Someone to throw me a bone
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Last edited by wanna_lick_me? at Jun 4, 2006,
#3
im gonna record the song and post it ill do a blues version too not a bad idea at all thanks
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