#1
Heres one I put together a while back. It's about war and corruption of our world.

Fires in the Sky
are burning, brighter then the sun
Fear is thumping in our hearts
the war for peace has begun
Law will gone and left our streets
Anarchy is the rule
Bodies littering the roads
The next one might be you

Our world is lighting day by day
and we just keep passing by
The ground is burrning at our feet
And there's fire in the sky

Darkness is all that is left
Yet we still yearn for light
Our hearts still manage to find hope
Through the black of night
With a simple press of a button
Our response is sent through
Flying at twice the speed of sound
Whats coming is well overdue

Our world is lighting day by day
and we just keep passing by
The ground is burrning at our feet
And there's fire in the sky

We are 10000 miles apart
yet we still can ruin lives
We live in a third world country
Where only the strongest will survive
But what can we do in a world
Controlled by hate and greed
The media sees nothing
And the government misleads

Our world is lighting day by day
and we just keep passing by
The ground is burrning at our feet
And there's fire in the sky
#2
i really enjoyed the chorus to the song...it was strong and an attention grabber...a good hook...the verses were good but not quite as good...i liked the last verse a lot, but the second one and the end of the first were a little weak..they just didn't seem to flow right, at least to me...then again i've never heard the rythm...but as far as the actual words themselves....they were very original for a topic that is so overused...i really liked them man...overall a really good job...thanks for sharing.
"Peace, Love, and Stadium Arcadium"
#3
Thanks, I had a little bit of a writers block while that song. Anyways, have got a song for me to crit?
#4
"the war for peace has begun"
Brilliant, loved that line. Sums up what i think you were trying to say in the song.
Really enjoyed it.
The only bad thing about it reall was
"We are 10000 miles apart
yet we still can ruin lives"
I like what you are trying to say in tese line, i just dont like the way it is put, but hey, thats just my opinion.