#1
On till the end
without a pen
the book tells me to write
under a name of silence
in fear that i might
turn the page
causing pain


(chorus)
Then i draw a picture
but this aint a picture book
the words writen by the story
the words can just sit and look

(solo)

Copyright laws
fracture my thoughts
of the tale to tell
that nothing is well

And as i read the back
the desctipition
was'nt black
but rather a clear
not to the consumer
as he bought it like a
teenage girl buys
a rumor


(chorus)
Then i draw a picture
but this aint a picture book
the words writen by the story
the words can just sit and look


The end has came
i lie here insane
the book has changed
and i lie here in rage
i just needed that pen
to write about the things
that could've have been
before my end
#2
its a god concept,
the problem is that the way that you wrote it..in a more "clear" way
makes it sounds a bit more childish than it should have been
and another thing:

On till the end
without a pen
the book tells me to write
under a name of silence
in fear that i might
turn the page
causing pain


i know its kinda of "bitchy" thing to say but;
dont make me think about other songs while reading yours.

nice sentence building, it has quite good melody stracture by my taste.
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