#1
Finally a new song. Had quite a bit musical block there heh.

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Lyrics:

Lights spin
And her feet can't stop
Her body swims
In the green lagoon

Neon smoke
And she just can't breathe
Still she flies
To the same old beat

Till she's lost control

Hell burns
As she swallows fire
Laughs as she
Enters the black hole

And she's lost control

Feedback would be appreciated. and i'd love to hear your stuff and crit back so leave me a link.

Thanks,

Fatima
#2
this reminded me so much of like iron and wine and kind of like spitting. This was great. Amazing vocals. I totally envy you for that. Great lyrics...everything about this is perfect, especially for a simple acoustic, folkish style song. I checked out a couple more of your songs, pretty impressive stuff. It's so simple, but it's pleasing to the ear.

I don't know if this warrants return crit or not, but here is a link https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=372071
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lol man plz dont take this the wrong way but you really cant rap.
#4
I checked out the cover on your dmusic- by far the most amazing thing ever.
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lol man plz dont take this the wrong way but you really cant rap.
#5
Youre voice kicks arse. The echo on the vox was really cool. Laugh was cool, too. Guitar is simple, but effective. The vocals do all the work here. You really know how to arrange your harmonies and overdubs and I really love when people can do that. The lyrics are so trippy but cool. I also think it is the perfect length. Any shorter and it would have lost impact, any longer and you would have needed another riff.

I'm definitely keeping an ear out for your next song.

Here's some of my stuff (alot different to this).
http://www.myspace.com/seevousplay