#1
With you where do I begin
I dont know if I'll ever win
Right now I'd swim across the sea
I write songs, why dont you please ask me

Fall into my arms
And I will show you all that we can be, yes I will

My mind is twisting over you
My heart is splitting into two

Here comes the sun
Now its the time
For us to sing
Forget everything, our souls will fly
After sunset, we'll jump into the sky


*I have a next part of lines for the rest of the chorus. Tell me what you think, or if I should just repeat the chrous twice. By the way the chorus is where I left off.

Just touch the sand
Hold my hand
And I'll be your man
I'm sorry I just can't let you go
Now let's hit the show

*The above is the additional part.
#3
oh i forgot, sorry.

whoever is the person who set the rules. please take out my first post today, which is just being a boy, and keep this one up if you can. thanks.
Last edited by JoeCompton at Jun 6, 2006,
#4
don't like it... u needa stop forcin the rhymes bud. Also it seemed a lil off i don't kno what it was but something about it struck me as strange...
"the world will not know true peace until the power of love overcomes the love of power"
-Jimi Hendrix
#5
Not sure if i like it. Yea you can rhyme but i'm not sure if i get the whole concept of the song.
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#6
the concept might be too simple its hard. its just simply a song about a girl that i really like.
#7
i got what it's about bud...
"the world will not know true peace until the power of love overcomes the love of power"
-Jimi Hendrix