#1
Yeah, spent a bit working on it. It is the whole song, just not the finished version I guess. For example, I don't really like the last line, but it's all I could think of at the time of writing this. Also, the censored words which are censored by this forum is the word wh0res. Crit for crit


I'm a wanderer of man
Who travels across the lands
With a magical band

I'm a wanderer of man
Who travelled across the desert sands
Where the snakes they slithered and ran
I came to an arabian man
Who asked why I should be able to pass
So I told him alas,

I've seen it all
I've seen the wars
Seen the *****s
And seen the poor
Yes, even the shadow of man

I'm a wanderer of man
Who travelled through a forest
There were animals everywhere
Yet to my despair
A wolf he came to me
The wolf asked why I should be able to pass
So I told him alas,

I've seen it all
I've seen the wars
Seen the *****s
And seen the poor
Yes, even the shadow of man

I'm a wanderer of man
Who travelled to the depths of the sea
Where no fished seemed to have swam
There I met an very old man
Who said that his name was I am
He asked me for a reason to pass
So I said

I've seen it all
I've seen the wars
Seen the *****s
And seen the poor
Yes, even the shadow of man

But the greatest thing i've ever seen
Were the space faring beings
They reminded me like something right out of my dreams
The beings told me the one great thing
The thing that mattered most to me
It was complex but i'll say it anyway
That the meaning of it all
Is to let my mind be free
Last edited by lithium500 at Jun 6, 2006,
#3
sounds almost like it should be played to the rhythm and chords to like 'fell in love with a girl"

dude, i have the chord progression for you.... i was gonna use it on something, but ill save it for later, it goes with your lyrics well...

do it barred, b, a, g, f#, one measure each,.. and like when it says ' i told him alas' or whatever, go to E, and then when it says 'even the shadow of man' go from a, b, g f# all in like one measure, you know.

do the strum pattern like v ^v^v


anyway, if you dont like it, whatever, but i like it.
Last edited by Glen'sHeroicAct at Jun 6, 2006,
#4
I don't know yet. Probally fast. I'm already trying to think of background music, as this seems to be my best lyrics yet.
#5
I think this if very good. As I got towards the end, I thought, wow....a whole different level of thought can be added here. If you're game to explore, this could add a punch....

Since the listener is already fully in-tune with the Wanderer of Man, how about spicing up that last verse that starts with that line, to bring about more thought.

I'm thinking, bring a Higher Being to the surface......

(4th verse, or 3rd verse if Beginning is Intro):

I am a wonderering man
Who travelled to the depths of the sea
Where no fish seemed to have swam
There I met a very old man
Who said that his name was, I AM
He asked me for a reason to pass
So I said
#7
Okay grasshopper. I intergrated you idea into there. Glen'sHeroicAct i'll try out your guitar riffs for this tommorow when I have time.