thats pretty good. it seems like it could easily be made into a song. to me it seems like the riff at the end that repeats is perfect for lyrics to go over.
“Science cannot solve the ultimate mystery of nature. And that is because, in the last analysis, we ourselves are part of nature and therefore part of the mystery that we are trying to solve.”

-Max Planck

The timing sounded a bit screwed up but other than that its great. Keep workin on it