#1
Here's some lyrics our singer wrote for a new song of ours. Lemme know whatcha think..

chorus:
pretty eyes, come and stay by my side
cause youre all thats on my mind
and right now thats the way
its gonna stay

verse 1:
the light sparkles in your eyes
like stars in the sky
on a cold night in july
and I'm losing sleep thinking about you

verse 2:
when I hear that phone ring
my heart just skips a beat
and nothing else in this world
can get me out of my seat

verse 3:
lips so smooth, skin so fair
your kiss feels like theres magic in the air
and I aint gotta clue
except about how I feel for you

verse 4:
hand in hand, short drive home
wild hearts and thougts may roam
hearin some slow, sweet song from the birds above
sittin, and wonderin if I'm in love
#2
Um, if this was for a typical 14-year old girl fanbase, sure it would do.
That isnt a good thing by the way.

Constructively, it's cliched, it has no substance, it's rhymes are forced, it's cheesy.
I mean it sounds like all the cheesy 80's pop songs, combined with some modern cheesy pop, in one song.
I liked the first two words, though.