#1
I just wrote the lyrics to my new song, "The Great Escape". I hope you enjoy it, comments are definately encouraged.

Verse 1:

Maybe you think that I'm unkown
There are things that won't be shown
In my life
Now I can't go
And I don't know
How to find the way to home

Chorus:

All thoughts remain
All systems go
All senses fail
But now I'm home
I can't replace
What I have lost
Now you're gone
And what's the cost
The great escape

Verse 2:

Help me
I'm scared
Please come here
Dry my tears
In the wrath of screwed up dreams
If you can't help
Then why don't you just leave

Chorus:

All thoughts remain
All systems go
All senses fail
But now I'm home
I can't replace
What I have lost
Now you're gone
And what's the cost
The great escape

Bridge:

I can't breathe
I can't see
Without you
Hold me
In your arms
Tonight

Chorus:

All thoughts remain
All systems go
All senses fail
But now I'm home
I can't replace
What I have lost
Now you're gone
And what's the cost
The great escape

Repeat chorus.

End:

The great escape
Of my life
Tonight.

And that's it. Please tell me what you think about it.
Quote by NGD1313
Well I don't know about solos but how about that Smoke on the Water riff. It's like...impossible.


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I'm Jake. I'm a musician, philosopher, and exhibitionist.
Last edited by Jacob6293 at Jun 9, 2006,
#2
Should be heavy in style of music. Lyrically it is simply lacking good depth. It has some but not quite enough.


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#3
i liked how it sort of flowed naturally. the first few verses show you opening up and then the bridge is more of a "last words" sort of thing. the ending might come out a bit cheesy but other than that two thumbs up